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The Night

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Incarnate beauty
Sitting by my side.
Stars we're beneath
On this brilliant night.
Half moon high above,
Chill wind passing by.
She holds all my love
And her's is now mine.
I wrote this after the night mentioned in my last journal entry. It doesn't describe things fully (I left out the movie for effect), but it's pretty good and lives up to my personal standards. Enjoy.
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valleigh's avatar
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Overall
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:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Impact

I really liked how you changed it up, and used a little different style. A good writer can change their style and still be very good at what they do.

the choice of words was great, it really helped the flow, and your point.

You did great with the angel you went with, when you wrote this poem, keep changing up your work, it's good to surprise your readers that way.

Your good at making a good impact, and I hope you will always do that, go with the flow, and do what you love, and you can never go wrong.